Sunday, April 28, 2013

Poetic Dementia



The Lord's sitting on a haystack laughing.
The bees look up, tilt their heads.
A farmer's afraid to put his hand near.
The Lord pets the bees.

The Lord is going to pick you up
And use you in a way you don't expect.
I know you love the Lord.
I know you love bees.

You can't swear around the bees, it upsets them.
Do you know what happens to your communication
When you say God damn it, God damn it?
It gets broken.

As a nurse I receive a lot of jumbled words from minds crazed by pain, drugs, or dementia.  Some of the words make vague sense, like a poem.  If there is already a poetic form which is a transcription of such altered mind states, then this is my attempt at one.  If not then here it begins.

Posted at Poets United Poetry Pantry #148.

12 comments:

  1. and I think it should continue, what a great idea for a book.
    I love the poem too, I very much agree with what it is saying.

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  2. Very nice really, you might create altogether a new form.

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  3. Touching and deeply riveting, Libby. The drugs, pain can truly bring poetry in varied hues. Lovely lines....

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  4. I love this, Libby - especially the idea of God sitting on a haystack laughing. Somewhere I am sure He is. I also love "The Lord's going to use you in a way you dont expect." There seems to be a grain of truth running through the ravings of the demented. You have a keen ear.

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  5. Very true to life. Not always pretty.

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  6. I see this too Libby. Sometimes there is sense behind the confusion and we have to observe and find ways to crack the code.

    Your words are beautiful.

    Anna :o]

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  7. Sometimes poetry presents itself in unexpected ways.

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  8. I am in awe at your blog and your wisdom. This poem is no exception. However I think it is too understandable to be the rantings of a demented or psychotic mind.
    Watch the film Mulholland Drive, directed by David Lynch. The film is about the experience of psychosis from the view within. I'd be interested to read what you write immediately after you've seen that.

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    1. You are right. I did edit out the word salad to make it understandable for the reader. If you recognize a touch of psychosis here, you are right again. The entire conversation was a lucid moment shared briefly. I have not seen the movie, I will let you know what I think. Thanks for the insightful comment.

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  9. An interesting idea for a poem! I'd be interested to read more lines that you must hear during your day.

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